Introduction of Time, Character, Place, and Main Prop. One ordinary day like all orthinary days Mike went to school and sit on the bench with his friends.

Character in action with Main Prop. Then all he's friends went to play soccer. But then he realized that he forgot something on the bench.

Physical and mental characteristics, and present situation. Then she was there sitting on the bench, she was so pretty he couldn't move his eyes of her. He was petrified

Character's reaction to event, and proposed goal. He was astonished, he ask to a friend if he knows she because he was going to talk to her right now no matter what.

Character in action, moving toward goal. He felt how butterfly's were flying inside his belly. Now one friend is talking to her. Maybe that friend can introduce me to her.

Character in action with Main Prop. He set on the bench and talk to her.

Character's sensory reaction to Main Prop. The bench broke and he fell to the floor. The hit wasn't so hard, he felt more pain because the girl was riendose of him.
Character's reflective delay

Character's proposed new goal. He went to play soccer and thought that there's no way that they could be together. He need to forgot her. That way he wouldn't feel sad again.

Character's reflection on the situation. I don't need some one that loves me, I have my friends and sports. I don't have time for a girlfriend.

Character's emotional response, understated. When the game was over he went to the bench. He left there the thing he forgot before. But when he arrive he listen the most beautiful voice in the world saying "hey, are you okay?"

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Comment by Michael D. Brown on June 13, 2017 at 1:52pm

I like the ending (even though it was not supposed to be brought to a close that way), but I suppose we really don't know how far their "relationship" will go. Nice work.

Comment by Alejandra Sánchez on June 13, 2017 at 1:48pm
The story is so sweet and I like the mysterious ending.
Comment by Hernán on June 13, 2017 at 1:44pm

IT´S BEAUTIFUL, A PIECE OF ART

Comment by Mariana Espinosa Navarro on June 13, 2017 at 1:35pm
I really liked the ending of your story, I love open endings

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