A long time ago, in a small city near the beach, a young girl found a golden necklace with a green charm in the sand. The necklace was beautiful, so she decided to wear it and keep it. The green charm began to shine and she felt a tickle in all her body, but quickly that tickle became a burning pain. She screamed desperately asking for help, but when no one cared about her, she ran to the sea. The burning pain was increasing while she was running, and the sea seemed farther than before. She touched the necklace, and felt a warm liquid. The liquid made made her hand's skin disappear, and a bigger pain appeared. When she arrived to the sea, the pain stopped, and now she knew that the poison in the necklace was making her suffer, and sea water was the antidote. She tried to take off the necklace, but it was stuck. She thought about her two options: get out the sea and die painfully or stay in the sea until death. She swam offshore while crying, thinking about how long she would remain alive.

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Comment by Jorge Álvaro Zúñiga Velázquez on June 13, 2017 at 9:06pm

Great story with lots of twists. I feel sad abou the girl but I hope she can survive. 

Comment by Diana Zenteno on June 13, 2017 at 1:56pm

great imagination sweetheart

Comment by Michael D. Brown on June 13, 2017 at 1:55pm

This is excellent, and the open-ending is right on target with the aims of mumblecore.

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Comment by Alejandra Sánchez on June 13, 2017 at 1:43pm
Wow I really liked it, and also I think you write pretty good.
Comment by Hernán on June 13, 2017 at 1:43pm
Comment by Luis GS on June 13, 2017 at 1:34pm
Good mumblecore, one of the best I ever read

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